[series?] The fair...

[Threeboy]

just a note.. we talked about this at playland...

TrueNuff: Sublime
@ The Fair
<P>( Rob is squishing down a puff of cotten candy..)
<P> (he gets it down to the size of a marble.
<P> (he eats it)
<P> ROB: AAAAAHHHHHHHH........... (runs off screen)

TrueNuff:
<P> (one big swoop behind rob as he runs across 4 panels)
<P> Jay & Trey eating snowcones)
<P> Girls eating mini doughnuts...
<P> Etc...

[Brando]

These are funny... made me think of one...


TrueNuff: Can't stop the Bum Rush
<P>
[Trey, Jay, sitting in a ride car (one edge not visible). It is visibly shaking]
TREY: W-w-w-whoa!
<P>
[Still shaking, some new tilt angle or whatever]
JAY: Its gonna c-c-come off the r-r-rails!
<P>
[Shaking...]
TREY: Im-m-magine once the ride starts!
<P>
[Pan out slightly, Rob is beside them, shaking from the sugar]
ROB: Look, I'm T-T-TRYING to s-s-stop!

[J.Rai]

This is an option - lemme know whatch'alls think: (WILL FINISH LATER)

TrueNuff: Sublime
@ The Fair
<p>Trey: [eating Cotton Candy] I love this cotton candy stuff!
Jay: Isnt' is called Candy Floss?
Rob: [enters with his own Cotton Candy] Hey guys!
<p> Rob: [holding cotton candy in between his hands] Wanna see a cool trick? Check this out!

<P>( Rob is squishing down a puff of cotten candy..)
<P> (he gets it down to the size of a marble.
<P> (he eats it)
<P> ROB: AAAAAHHHHHHHH........... (runs off screen)

[Threeboy]

funky number of panels.. it can be done though.

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anything is possible.

[J.Rai]

This is an option - lemme know whatch'alls think:

TrueNuff: Sublime
@ The Fair
<p>Trey: [eating Cotton Candy] I love this cotton candy stuff!
Jay: [holding candy apple] Isnt' is called Candy Floss?
Rob: [enters with his own Cotton Candy] Hey guys!

<p> Rob: [holding cotton candy in between his hands] Wanna see a cool trick? Check this out!

<p> [Rob squishing the cotton candy]
[Jay's candy apple falls off stick]

<p> [Rob grabs Trey's Candy]
Trey: Hey!
[Jay stares angrily at his fallen candy apple]


<p> [Rob squishes them together]
[Jay soccer kicks the apple off panel]

<p> [Rob tosses the little blue/pink ball into his mouth]
[Jay is now paying attention to Rob again]

<p> Rob: *Poing*
Jay: [raises eyebrow] Um...
Trey: [backing away] Uh-oh...

<p> ROB: AAAAAHHHHHHHH!! (runs off screen)

[J.Rai]

TrueNuff: Sublime
@ The Fair
<p>Trey: [eating Cotton Candy] I love this cotton candy stuff!
Jay: [holding candy apple] Isnt' is called Candy Floss?
Rob: [enters with his own Cotton Candy] Hey guys!

<p> Rob: [holding cotton candy in between his hands] Wanna see a cool trick? Check this out!

<p> [Rob squishing the cotton candy]
[Jay's candy apple falls off stick]

<p> [Rob grabs Trey's Candy]
Trey: Hey!
[Jay stares angrily at his fallen candy apple]


<p> [Rob squishes them together]
[Jay soccer kicks the apple off panel]

<p> [Rob tosses the little blue/pink ball into his mouth]
[Jay is now paying attention to Rob again]

<p> Rob: *Poing*
Jay: [raises eyebrow] Um...
Trey: Uh-oh...

<p> ROB: AAAAAHHHHHHHH!! (runs off screen)


[b]TrueNuff: Choose Life
(one big swoop behind rob as he runs across 4 panels)
<p> Girls eating mini doughnuts
<p> Steph and Byron eating snocones, sticking their tounges out showing off the colours...
<p> Through the water (on top of?) in a log ride, Ninja is in one of the logs
<p> Jay: Is he gonna be okay?
Trey: He'll wear himself out in an hour or so

TrueNuff: Bum Rush
<P>
[Trey, Jay, sitting in a ride car (one edge not visible). It is visibly shaking]
TREY: W-w-w-whoa!
<P>
[Still shaking, some new tilt angle or whatever]
JAY: Its gonna c-c-come off the r-r-rails!
<P>
[Shaking...]
TREY: Im-m-magine once the ride starts!
<P>
[Pan out slightly, Rob is beside them, shaking from the sugar]
ROB: Look, I'm T-T-TRYING to s-s-stop

[Threeboy]

Ninja is in one of the logs <-- lub dis shit.

"Trey: He'll wear himself out in an hour or so" line's good. would "Trey: The sugar should run out in a few hours..." be better?

[J.Rai]

I dunno, I think the one's okay...

[J.Rai]

Opener:

TrueNuff: M.(a.f.)I.A.
[Guys @ Jay’s living room]
<p>[Phone ring]
Brando: Phone!
Rob: Phone!
Trey: Phone!
Jay: [reaching for phone] Shut up!
<p> Jay: Yeah, go.
Phone: Jay, it’s Julie, are the guys there? Come join us at the fair?
Jay: The Fair?
<p> [at fair, Julie on phone]
Julie: Yeah, where have you guys been? I haven’t seen you in like, a month!
Phone: I don’t know. Here, I guess.
<p> [Jay’s living room again]
Phone: At your house? For a month? What have you been doing?
Jay: [yelling] I don’t know, okay!? See you in an hour!

[J.Rai]

Before "Bum Rush"

TrueNuff: Up the river without a stick in the mud
[Jay and Brando on Ferris Wheel]
<p>[wide shot, establishing that they're on the top of a ferris wheel - maybe the guys are just silhouetted here]
Brando: I don't see him anywhere.
Jay: My cousin got lost at the fair once when he was little
<p> [closer frame of the two of them in the seat/car, looking around]
Brando: How do you lose a guy that big?
Jay: They couldn't find him for most of the day
<p> Brando: [pointing] Wait! There he is!
Jay: Turned out he was in the psychic's tent all day
<p> Brando: [on walkie-talkie] Eagle eye to mother Goose, the Robin is swimming upstream on the log ride
Radio: Stop calling me that!
Jay: PUNCHLINE, damnit

[Threeboy]

"Eagle eye to mother Goose, the Robin..." bahhahaha

probably punchline enough for me ;)

[J.Rai]

TrueNuff: Small Hands
[@ Ball throw/knock down bottles booth]
<p> Brando: Hey, are those astronaut pants you're wearing? Cause your ass is out of this world!
[Small kid picks up baseball]
<p> Chick Carny: *wink* Hehe, thanks. Hey, you're cute.
Brando: [stares]
[small kid winds up]
<p> Brando: [stares]
[small kid throws ball]
<p>[small kid's ball bounces back and hit Brando in the head]
Jay: Bound to happen
Trey: Don't mess with the formula

[J.Rai]

TrueNuff: M.(a.f.)I.A.
[Guys @ Jay’s living room]
<p>[Phone ring]
Brando: Phone!
Rob: Phone!
Trey: Phone!
Jay: [reaching for phone] Shut up!
<p> Jay: Yeah, go.
Phone: Jay, it’s Julie, are the guys there? Come join us at the fair?
Jay: The Fair?
<p> [at fair, Julie on phone]
Julie: Yeah, where have you guys been? I haven’t seen you in like, a month!
Phone: I don’t know. Here, I guess.
<p> [Jay’s living room again]
Phone: At your house? For a month? What have you been doing?
Jay: [yelling] I don’t know, okay!? See you in an hour!

TrueNuff: Sublime
@ The Fair
<p>Trey: [eating Cotton Candy] I love this cotton candy stuff!
Jay: [holding candy apple] Isnt' is called Candy Floss?
Rob: [enters with his own Cotton Candy] Hey guys!

<p> Rob: [holding cotton candy in between his hands] Wanna see a cool trick? Check this out!

<p> [Rob squishing the cotton candy]
[Jay's candy apple falls off stick]

<p> [Rob grabs Trey's Candy]
Trey: Hey!
[Jay stares angrily at his fallen candy apple]


<p> [Rob squishes them together]
[Jay soccer kicks the apple off panel]

<p> [Rob tosses the little blue/pink ball into his mouth]
[Jay is now paying attention to Rob again]

<p> Rob: *Poing*
Jay: [raises eyebrow] Um...
Trey: Uh-oh...

<p> ROB: AAAAAHHHHHHHH!! (runs off screen)

[b]TrueNuff: Choose Life
(one big swoop behind rob as he runs across 4 panels)
<p> Girls eating mini doughnuts
<p> Steph and Byron eating snocones, sticking their tounges out showing off the colours...
<p> Through the water (on top of?) in a log ride, Ninja is in one of the logs
<p> Jay: Is he gonna be okay?
Trey: He'll wear himself out in an hour or so

TrueNuff: Small Hands
[@ Ball throw/knock down bottles booth]
<p> Brando: Hey, are those astronaut pants you're wearing? Cause your ass is out of this world!
[Small kid picks up baseball]
<p> Chick Carny: *wink* Hehe, thanks. Hey, you're cute.
Brando: [stares]
[small kid winds up]
<p> Brando: [stares]
[small kid throws ball]
<p>[small kid's ball bounces back and hit Brando in the head]
Jay: Bound to happen
Trey: Don't mess with the formula

TrueNuff: Up the river without a stick in the mud
[Jay and Brando on Ferris Wheel]
<p>[wide shot, establishing that they're on the top of a ferris wheel - maybe the guys are just silhouetted here]
Brando: I don't see him anywhere.
Jay: My cousin got lost at the fair once when he was little
<p> [closer frame of the two of them in the seat/car, looking around]
Brando: How do you lose a guy that big?
Jay: They couldn't find him for most of the day
<p> Brando: [pointing] Wait! There he is!
Jay: Turned out he was in the psychic's tent all day
<p> Brando: [on walkie-talkie] Eagle eye to mother Goose, the Robin is swimming upstream on the log ride
Radio: Stop calling me that!
Jay: He kept saying he knew they'd find him...


TrueNuff: Bum Rush
<P>
[Trey, Jay, sitting in a ride car (one edge not visible). It is visibly shaking]
TREY: W-w-w-whoa!
<P>
[Still shaking, some new tilt angle or whatever]
JAY: Its gonna c-c-come off the r-r-rails!
<P>
[Shaking...]
TREY: Im-m-magine once the ride starts!
<P>
[Pan out slightly, Rob is beside them, shaking from the sugar]
ROB: Look, I'm T-T-TRYING to s-s-stop, oka-a-ay??

[J.Rai]

TrueNuff: Monkey Target
[Jay, Trey, Brando walking home (sidewalk), Brando carrying big stuffed animal maybe]
<p> Jay: Well, that was fun
Trey: Yeah, it's nice to get out every so often
<p> Brando: [looking at his toy] I gotta find a cute chick to give this to now...
Trey: Heh, like that girl that gave it to you so you wouldn't sue the fair?
<p> Brando: Hey man, don't hate.
Jay: Yes sir, looks like we all had a good time out tonight...
<p>[pan out a bit, Rob crawling along a ways behind them]
Rob: Nectar... I need nectar...
Jay: Yup, good times...

[Threeboy]

haha ender rocks.
*daps all around*