[series] Camping II

[Threeboy]

*might* be linked to road trip II
http://www.truenuff.com/forums/viewtopic.php?p=4312

TrueNuff: Workahol
@ Noontime, etc, etc...
<P4> (everyone looks like they're done setting up)
JAY: (holding beer) You're not gonna start drinking now are you?

[Threeboy]

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[Threeboy]

we need some lead in's to it, and an end i guess, and the middle... heh, so this series needs lots of fleshin' out.

[Brando]

MERGED! (From closed thread)

[@JAYs, getting ready for the cabin trip]
<P>
[JAY is looking at list]
JAY: The budget looks good, with about $200 leftover for beer.
<P>
BRANDO: Dude, remember how much that got us last time?
<P>
[JAY is thinking about it, thought bubble with pic of huge beer case from old strip]
<P>
JAY:You're right. I could cut milk or TP perhaps.
BRANDO: TP for sure. The girls bring Cosmos.


[@ liquor store]
<P>
[JAY checking out some bottle of something]
TREY[offscreen]: DUDE! Get over here!
<P>
[in front of beer stand,]
STAND DESCRIPTION: New! *Molson Coffin* For BIG parties (or something to that effect) There should be a big coffin-sized crate full of beers
<P>
JAY: Damn, listen to this: "15.5 Gallons of beer. It's a Keg worth of individual servings"
TREY: Now THAT is a lot of beer.
<P>
TREY: Rawk. Let's get two.
JAY: Nice! It doubles as a bed for when you pass out!

[Threeboy]

[@ liquor store] doesn't seem punchey enough in the last panel

[Brando]

Rehashed...

TrueNuff: Coffins In The Fridge, Steaks On The Grill
[@ liquor store]
<P>
[Trey in front of beer stand,]
TREY: DUDE! Check this out!
STAND DESCRIPTION: New! *Molson Coffin* For BIG BBQ's (or something to that effect) There should be a big coffin-sized crate full of beers
<P>
JAY: Damn, listen to this: "15.5 Gallons of beer. It's a Keg worth of individual servings"
TREY: Wow. Let's get one.
<P>
JAY: That thing has as much beer as a Keg!
<P>
TREY: I meant one each.
JAY: Ok, don't scare me like that.

TrueNuff: Foresight is blind
[@cash register, Jay is paying]
CLERK: Total is $290.
BRANDO: Damn, not bad.
<P>[Jay is getting change / receipt.]
CLERK: You can pick them up at the loading bay.
JAY: Thanks.
<P>
[walking bikes around back of store, we realize they biked]
JAY: Not bad? Next time you pay then.
BRANDO: I meant the Clerk.
<P>[at back, Molson Coffin's are on a foklift, there is a forklift op in it]
OP: Right. Where'd ya park the truck?
TREY: Shit.

TrueNuff: Under the Influence
[trey walking towards Brando, they looking at coffins on the ground, taxi driving off]
<P>
TREY: Cripes, add $40 for the cab to take em home and this beer is getting expensive.
BRANDO: Hey, where is Jay?
<P>
[bent to pick it up]
TREY: He took the cab with the beer, but I didnt see him get out.
BRANDO: Huh, oh well.
TREY: Lift on three. One, two...
<P>
[Holding it]
TREY: THREE! Hey, this isn't that heavy after all.
BRANDO: Heh, either these are empty, or we're damn strong.
<P>
[only a foot is left from Brando and Trey walking off... we see JAY sitting up out of the remaining coffin, lid pushed off... he has a beer in hand and has the drunk expression.]
TREY: Call me 'the Undertreyker'
BRANDO: Eddie Branderro!

[Threeboy]

would this work better?

TrueNuff: Coffins In The Fridge, Steaks On The Grill
[@ liquor store]
<P>
[Trey in front of beer stand,]
TREY: DUDE! Check this out!
STAND DESCRIPTION: New! *Molson Coffin* For BIG BBQ's (or something to that effect) There should be a big coffin-sized crate full of beers
<P>
JAY: Damn, listen to this: "15.5 Gallons of beer. It's a Keg worth of individual servings"
TREY: Wow. Let's get one.
<P>
JAY: (looks disgusted)
<P>
TREY: I meant one each.
JAY: Ok, don't scare me like that.


Eddie Branderro?

[Brando]

Yeah, that's cleaner, for sure.

---

I was trying to think of a wrestler for Brando... It was Eddie Guerrero, but it's not nearly as cool as Undertreyker

[Threeboy]

hahah.. i used to watch wrestling, lemme rattle my brain

[Threeboy]

Cabin Strip Notes

Threeboy (11:26 PM) :
i think it's an all character event again, bitch bear showed up last time

Threeboy (11:27 PM) :
ninja can pop in for some hillarity too

Threeboy (11:27 PM) :
he can walk in and ask what side of the border he's on.

Threeboy (11:27 PM) :
dude, we gotta make fun of american beer agian, and price difference jokes perhaps

[Brando]

This almost happened at the Peace Arch crossing, but we can use it 4 the cabin.

Let me know if it is too speech intensive.

TrueNuff: Crossing Guards
<P>
[pulling up to border, maybe a sign that says 'declare all goods' and 'US Customs', one guy (JAY? In wagon?) and one girl must be in car, male driver]
GUARD: Citizenship?
<P>
[handing over passports]
JAY: Both Canadian.
GUARD: How do you know each other?
<P>
JAY: We're friends.
GUARD: JUST friends?
JAY: Yeah.
GUARD: That's good...
<P>
GUARD: So where do you live?
JAY: She...
GUARD: I meant you.

[Threeboy]

HAHAH wtf

[Brando]

IDEA: Screaming coming from a tent and the guys will think its a girl but when they get there to save her its Rob scared of a spider...

[Brando]

This will be a part of this series too

TrueNuff: Biker bar
<P>
[sitting around the cabin porch, bikes strewn, all tired, bruised and drinking beers]
TREY: I am so out of shape
<P>
JAY:Me too, my ass hasn't hurt this bad since the last camping trip
<P>
[everyone gives JAY wierd looks]
<P>
JAY: FROM THE HIKING! MUSCLE PAIN!

[Brando]

TrueNuff: Brand Loyalty
@
<P> Jay: lets go camping at north beach?
Kari: (with girls) Why?
<P> Brando: Girls!
Jay: Beer!
Rob: Macintosh Computers!
<P> (everyone wtf?)
<P> Rob: I mean, beer and girls, woo!

[Brando]

Threeboy: Brando looking at clipboard, saying "clothes, check, tent, check, chairs, check... hows your checklist going jay? *closeup of clipboard* it just says "beer beer beer beer beer"

[Threeboy]

dont forget to pull the other biking strips fromm here
http://www.truenuff.com/forums/viewtopic.php?t=702

also, if the biking strips are putting us over, we can always pull them and put them in thier own mini series.

[Brando]

I think this is best as #2:

TrueNuff:
[brando is reading off a list of things to bring...]
<P>
BRANDO: clothes, check, tent, check, chairs, check...
<P>
TREY: GBA, check, extra batteries, check, discman, check, game mags, check...
<P>
BRANDO: How's your list going JAY?
<P>
[jay's list has only beer on it...]

[Threeboy]

Goddamn, we turn water into wow. i love it.


TrueNuff: Bear Necessities
[guys are reading off a list of things to bring...]
<P3>
JULIE: hiking shoes, check, campfire shoes, check, walking shoes, check...
KARI: (huge list on the floor): Makeup, check...
RAYE: (just holding clipboard)
BRANDO: bandaids, check, polysporin, check, ice pack, check...
TREY: gameboy, check, extra batteries, check, gameboy light, check...
ROB: How's your list going JAY?
<P>
[jay's list has only beer on it, scrawled everywhere, some crossed out, some not...
BEER
BEER
BEER
Jay: Uh, it's going alright...

[Brando]

melikes

[Brando]

reworded walking shoes to cooking shoes... hehehe...

[Brando]

Since there wasnt much support for the Cosmo / TP / Beer budget one...
NEXT IN LINE:

TrueNuff: Coffins In The Fridge, Steaks On The Grill
[@ liquor store]
<P>
[Trey in front of beer stand,]
TREY: DUDE! Check this out!
STAND DESCRIPTION: New! *Molson Coffin* For BIG BBQ's (or something to that effect) There should be a big coffin-sized crate full of beers
<P>
JAY: Damn, listen to this: "15.5 Gallons of beer. It's a Keg worth of individual servings"
TREY: Wow. Let's get one.
<P>
JAY: (looks disgusted)
<P>
TREY: I meant one each.
JAY: Ok, don't scare me like that.

Let me know if you need any changes before she goes to the template.

[Threeboy]

i'll throw a goofy cardboard dracula in there too.. I VANT TO SUCK YOUR BEER!

[Brando]

Reworked for August 4th.

TrueNuff: We like our budgets loose
truenuff20030804.jpg

[@liquor store, looking at list and coffins]
<P>
[JAY is looking at list]
BRANDO: These are $150 each.
JAY: The budget looks tight. I don’t know if we have enough for 2 of these.
<P>
JAY: Last time we spent nearly $200 on beer.
BRANDO: Remember what that got us though?
<P>
[JAY is thinking about it, thought bubble with pic of huge beer case from old strip]
<P>
JAY: You're right. I could cut milk or TP perhaps.
BRANDO: Cut TP then. The girls bring Cosmos.

[Threeboy]

i tweaked the dialog before it went live

[Threeboy]

NOTES:

+ They go biking, beaching, and one should comment about slacking off.

+ Why are you all cut up? Canada Rocks! Yeah I agree, canada rocks but why are you cut up? (kid yelling avalanche) (bitch bear belches creates rock slide)

[Threeboy]

TrueNuff: cat's got it!
@ Planning for camping

Alright, who's gonna book the campgrounds? Raye you can...

They just stare around for a bit..

alright, julie you phone up and book the campgrounds.

[Threeboy]

Have them saying "this will be the best camping trip ever" and have the gnome latched onto the bumper...

[Threeboy]

TrueNuff
@ Girls shopping
<P> Julie: Since the guys are getting the booze, we're getting the food...
Kari: What do guys eat?

<P> Julie: Veggie dogs?
Kari: Oh yeah! Everyone loves veggie dogs, and tofu burger!

<P> Kari: How you doing rob?

<P> (camera pans over to show rob sitting in the shopping cart)
Rob: (hand in bag of oreos) we're out of cookies

[Threeboy]

*mad crew brainstorm session*

NOTES:

Rob: (reaching for something)
Julie: bad rob.

Rob: Shoulnd't I get out of this before you unpack it?
(the girls remove something heavy, cart tips over)

Rob: (in cart) Hey baby want to go for a ride?

(Camera shows waist up) Rob: hey baby, how you doing?
(camera panned out) Girl: Uh, you're in a shopping cart.

[Threeboy]

GNOME Notes:

gnome comics, he tries to foil the trip, but it backfires...

[Threeboy]

*PLOP*

(finish this)

TrueNuff: Under the Influence
[trey walking towards Brando, they looking at coffins on the ground, taxi driving off]
<P>
(Coffins in the bg)
BRANDO: Alright, we finally got these babies home.
TREY: Hell yeah. But where'd jay go?

<P> (talk bubble from coffin): ugh...

<P>

<P> Trey: (strangling jay) That was for camping jackass, you're gonna need that coffin when I'm done with you.
Brando:



Next comic, jay & trey fighting in the BG



TREY: Cripes, add $40 for the cab to take em home and this beer is getting expensive.
BRANDO: Hey, where is Jay?
<P>
[bent to pick it up]
TREY: He took the cab with the beer, but I didnt see him get out.
BRANDO: Huh, oh well.
TREY: Lift on three. One, two...
<P>
[Holding it]
TREY: THREE! Hey, this isn't that heavy after all.
BRANDO: Heh, either these are empty, or we're damn strong.
<P>
[only a foot is left from Brando and Trey walking off... we see JAY sitting up out of the remaining coffin, lid pushed off... he has a beer in hand and has the drunk expression.]
TREY: Call me 'the Undertreyker'
BRANDO: Eddie Branderro!

[Brando]

I think the girls shopping comes first before the guys return...

[Threeboy]

nah guys return is good, cause it'll give us more time to develop girls shopping

[Threeboy]

TrueNuff
@ Girls shopping
<P> Julie: Since the guys are getting the booze, we're getting the food...
Kari: What do guys eat?

<P> Julie: Veggie dogs?
Kari: Oh yeah! Everyone loves veggie dogs, and tofu burgers!

<P> Kari: How you doing rob?

<P> (camera pans over to show rob sitting in the shopping cart)
Rob: (hand in bag of oreos) we're out of cookies

i just pluarlized tofu burgers.

the one in the doc had rob speak in 1st panel, didn't like it...

[Threeboy]

TrueNuff
@ Girls shopping
<P> Julie: Since the guys are getting the booze, we're getting the food...
Kari: What do guys eat?

<P> Julie: Veggie dogs?
Kari: Oh yeah! Everyone loves veggie dogs, and tofu burgers!
Julie: ...and low fat meal replacement shakes!

<P> Kari: This will be the best camping trip ever!
Julie: You doing alright rob?

<P> (camera pans over to show rob sitting in the shopping cart)
Rob: (hand in bag of oreos) we're out of cookies

[Threeboy]

Now, the girls can be like "we got the food covered"

The guys can be like "we got the booze covered"

and then at the camping trip the guys are like "GUYS DONT EAT VEGGIE DOGS!"

and then girls can be like "GIRLS DONT DRINK BEER!"

best camping trip EVER :D

[Brando]

Shit, that's a good one..

[Brando]

But this comes first, because they have to get home still.


TrueNuff: Under the Influence
[trey walking towards Brando, they looking at coffins on the ground, taxi driving off]
<P>
(Coffins in the bg)
BRANDO: Alright, we finally got these babies home.
TREY: Hell yeah. Let's take em inside.
<P>
BRANDO: Where's Jay? We need 3 people to lift these!
(grunt from inside coffin)
<P>(jay rising out, looking wasted)
<P> Trey: (strangling jay) That was for camping jackass, you're gonna need that coffin when I'm done with you.
Brando: ...and in the green top, The Undertreyker!

[Brando]

Final: Edit this post until complete.

TrueNuff: The voice of reason
<P>(@ Jays, camping stuff around still, as in previous list strip, Trey and Jay are fighting in the background)
JULIE: Think we should book a site before we get there?
<P>
Kari: Good idea. Raye, you call the campground
<P> (looking around)
<P>
KARI: Right, I'll call the campground...

[Brando]

Final: Edit this post until strip is complete

TrueNuff: Under the Influence
[trey walking towards Brando, they looking at coffins on the ground, taxi driving off]
<P>
(Coffins in the bg)
BRANDO: Alright, we finally got these babies home.
TREY: Hell yeah. Let's take em inside.
<P>
BRANDO: Where's Jay? We need 3 people to lift these!
(grunt from inside coffin)
<P>(jay rising out, looking wasted)
<P> Trey: (strangling jay) That was for camping jackass, you're gonna need that coffin when I'm done with you.
Brando: ...and in the green top, The Undertreyker!

[Brando]

*highlight*
*mad crew brainstorm session*

NOTES:

Rob: (reaching for something)
Julie: bad rob.

Rob: Shoulnd't I get out of this before you unpack it?
(the girls remove something heavy, cart tips over)

Rob: (in cart) Hey baby want to go for a ride?

(Camera shows waist up) Rob: hey baby, how you doing?
(camera panned out) Girl: Uh, you're in a shopping cart.

[Brando]

This is not the same as three's idea... I just noticed that originally these happen over 2 locations... would this work, or should they not notice until they arrive? If this is b4 leaving, it should happen before the calling campgrounds strip, otherwise its after...

TrueNuff: Opposing Forces
<P>(guys bringing in beer)
TREY: We 're back! The booze is covered!
<P>
JULIE: And we got the food covered!
<P> (JAY looking in grocery bag)
JAY: What's this crap? Guys don't eat veggie dogs!
<P>(Raye holding case of beer to show julie)
JULIE: You morons! Girls don't drink beer!

[Threeboy]

it'll be better when they're actually on the trip

[Brando]

This one we don't like at present. Maybe something is salvageable

TrueNuff: Cat Fight
(truenuff20030811.jpg)

@shopping grocer
<P>(Rob is in cart, hot girl walks by)
ROB: Hey baby, wanna go for a ride?
<P> (Raye (?) in BG hears this)
Girl (cocky / snotty): You’re hardly in a position to offer me a ride. Besides, your mommies might be mad if I wandered off with you…
<P> (Raye (?) throws a right hook in the chick’s face)
<P> (Girls look all proud, maybe a dap, patting rob on head)
JULIE: C’mon dear.
ROB: Oh. Hell. Yes.

[Threeboy]

I think a time line like this is goot

undertreyker - looks solid
girsl shopping II - wee need a new appraoch perhaps?
Booking Camping - then girls get home, jay & trey fighgitng in the BG, in the foreground they talk about booking site

[Brando]

TrueNuff: Urban Legends
<P>(in car, jay at wheel)
JAY: Bags in?
KARI: Check!
<P>
JAY: Food In?
ROB: Check!
<P>
JAY: Everyone in?
BRANDO: Check, ya bastards.
<P>(side of car, gnome latched on with axe to bumper or equivalent)
SOMEONEINCAR: This will be the best camping ever!

[Threeboy]

^^ i like that one ^^

[Threeboy]

TrueNuff: The voice of reason
(@ Jays, camping stuff around still, as in previous list strip, Trey and Jay are fighting in the background)
<P> BRANDO: We got the booze
JULIE: We got the food
KARI: Bags are all packed too, almost good to go!
<P>
JULIE: Someone should call in and book a camp site.
BRANDO: Good idea. Raye, you call the campground
<P> (looking around)
<P>
BRANDO: Right, Kari you call the campground

[Threeboy]

also, have jay & trey fighting in the background, then cracking a beer, then cheer's ing at the last panel. hooray!

[Brando]

I like it. More built then the previous.

[Brando]

TrueNuff: Bully for you
<P>(robs cart is next to a cart with a little kid in it, the kid has a box of cookies in his hand, )
ROB: Those cookies look mighty delicious.
(kid sticks his tongue out)
<P> (rob grabs a doll from a rack next to him)
<P> (ROB pulls the dolls head off in front of the kid, the kid looks scared shitless)
<P> (ROB has cookies, kid is holding the doll, kids mom is back)
MOM: TIMMY! What did you do to that doll? Just you wait till your father sees this!

ALT: Timmy! What did you do to that doll? Just wait until your other mother hears about this!

[Brando]

Potential Final

TrueNuff: The voice of reason
(@ Jays, camping stuff around still, as in previous list strip, Trey and Jay are fighting in the background)
<P> BRANDO: We got the booze
JULIE: We got the food
KARI: Bags are all packed too, almost good to go!
<P> (trey and jay tired out)
JULIE: Someone should call in and book a camp site.
BRANDO: Good idea. Raye, you call the campground
<P> (looking around) (trey handing jay a beer)
<P> (trey and jay cheersing)
BRANDO: Right, Kari you call the campground

[Threeboy]

*Dap* to that

[Brando]

Ok, it's getting built...

Gnome bumper rebuild pending; splitting the group into 2 cars.

Maybe one group is radioing the other to check? Each car checks one thing?

IE:
Jay (on radio): Food?
ROB (same car): Not here!
RADIO: CHECK!
<P>
JAY: Booze?
RADIO: Nope!
ROB: Check!
<P>
JAY: Brando?
ROB: Uh...
RADIO: I'm here, you jackasses...

[Brando]

you can jump between shots of the 2 cars maybe

[Brando]

maybe they can go across the 2 cars... heads poking out from pack seat. Picture them like the car from the intro to that 70s show, but with 2 cars side by side... moving across the 2 cars left to right with text bubbles
Trey (front): Food?
Julie(backseat, looking): check!
Jay (front): Food?
Rob (back): Check!
Kari: Brando?
Brando: Check, thanks for the thought (or whatever)
Raye: (Laughing? Smiling?)

[Brando]

Ok, the cars are lengthwise...

TrueNuff: Urban Legends
<P3>
Trey: Food?
Julie: check!
Jay: Booze?
Rob: Check!
Kari: Brando?
Brando: Check, ya jackasses.
Raye: (Smiling; laughing would be noise)
<P> (gnome latched onto bumper)
Voice: To the campground! We're leaving all our troubles behind us!

[Threeboy]

since raye & brando are in the sam car, we can do something like this

*yoink* (from notes thread)

I think it'd be kind of funny to have one of the guys have a one sided conversation with raye... and of course she says nothing back...


<P> Trey: is that so eh?
Raye:
<P> Trey: I would think it'd hurt more than that.
Raye:
<P> Trey: What I don't get is why people do it.
Raye:
<P> Trey: Says something about society, doesn't it?
Raye:

but yeah, that's poop. I don't know if we can make it "funnier" IM JUST AN IDEA MAN DAMMIT.

[Threeboy]

and i guess since I put kari in the car she can be in the back sleeping or someting.

[Brando]

These are being templated. Let me know if you want any changes on them... This seems like the most logical order to me, some minor dialog tweaks as well.

Monday August 18, 2003
TrueNuff: Crossing Over
(truenuff20030818.jpg)
<P>
[pulling up to border, maybe a sign that says 'declare all goods' and 'US Customs', Brando’s car, maybe put a little rainbow sicker on the window of the booth, kinda like those ‘im gay’ rainbow stickers on cars…]
GUARD: Citizenship?
<P>
[handing over passports]
BRANDO: All Canadian.
GUARD: How do you know each other?
<P>
BRANDO: We're friends.
GUARD: JUST friends?
BRANDO: Yeah.
GUARD: That's good...
<P>
GUARD: So where do you live?
BRANDO: They both...
GUARD: I meant you.

Wednesday August 20, 2003
TrueNuff: Let the beat drop
(truenuff20030820.jpg)

@ the crew stops to eat somewhere on the road.
<P> (close up of sign: "CROSSROADS Cafe")
JAY: We can pick up some of those cool US-only munchies here!
<P> Julie: That reminds me of Britney.
<P> Trey: That reminds me of Bone Thugs.
<P> Jay: That reminds me that you two need to start listening to REAL MUSIC.
TREY: (posing, with wu tang sign? what is bone thugs sign?) [singing] see you at the crossroads crossroads...
JULIE: [singing] I love rock and roll...


Friday August 22, 2003
TrueNuff: Bacon Puffs
(truenuff20030822.jpg)

@ Car / Rob eating pork rinds, trey eating corn chips. Mouths full.
<P> Rob: what you doing?
Trey: Checking out this nutrition information... It says a serving of corn chips is 8 chips, who the hell only eats 8 chips?
<P> Rob: (the sound of agreeing with his mouth open – Rah, whudda fug?)
Trey: What's the info on those pork rinds?
<P> (Close up of bag)
Protein... (skull icon)
Calories... (skull icon)
(Yellow Warning Label) IF YOU HAVE EATEN THIS ENTIRE BAG YOU WILL DIE IN FIVE MINUTES.

<ALT (more formal version>SURGEON GENERAL WARNING: IT CAN BE HARMFUL OR FATAL TO INGEST THE ENTIRE CONTENTS OF THIS BAG IN LESS THAN A 24-HOUR PERIOD.
<P> (Trey & Rob look surprised)
Rob: We better split these.

[Brando]

TrueNuff: Stroboscope
@ driving going thru a tunnel..
<P> Jay: Ooh! A tunnel!
Rob: Yay!
<P> (Everyone happy)
<P> *black*
<P> (Everyone happy)
<P> *black*
<P> (ninja is in the back seat) (Everyone happy)
<P> *black*
<P> (everyone looking around shifty eyed, no ninja)

[Brando]

I think we should have some 'getting there' strips. Maybe some more driving ones?

TrueNuff: Imperial Rule
<P>@car
BRANDO: Why does Jay keep honking at me?
RAYE: *Shrug*
<P>Cars pass, dirty looks or shaking fists
KARI: Looks like they all want to pass. Speed up.
BRANDO: What's the hurry? The sign says 50 and I'm doing 60 already!
<P>
KARI: (looks at dash)
<P>
KARI: The limit is 50 MILES per hour, metric boy.
BRANDO: Miles?

TrueNuff: The common goal
<P>
@site, JAY looking into woods
JAY: This is gorgeous! What a spot! I don't want to set up yet, let's have a beer and enjoy the view, just for a few minutes...
OFFSCREEN: Pffffft!
<P>
JAY: Look at the trees! Smell the air! Feel the sun! We can set up later!
OFFSCREEN: Pffffft!
<P>JAY turns back...
You guys gotta learn to...
OFFSCREEN: Pffffft!
<P>JAY is back with group, they are all holding beers. Raye opens hers and it goes "Pffffft!"
TREY: What?

[Brando]

rayes beer doesn't make sound.

[Brando]

TrueNuff: We recycle cans & paper & jokes
@ campsite, group sitting around in chairs or logs or something with beers, the all crack open and make fizzy sounds
<P3>
TREY: Pfftt!
BRANDO: Pfftt!
JULIE: Pfftt!
ROB: Pfftt!
JAY (akimbos?): Pfftt! Pfftt!
RAYE: ...
<P>
(ROB and JAY (closest 2?) looking at her beer, RAYE shrugs or something..)
JAY: Whoa.

[Brando]

TrueNuff: Imperial Rule
<P>@car
BRANDO: Why does Jay keep honking at me?
RAYE: *Shrug*
<P>Cars pass, dirty looks or shaking fists
KARI: Looks like they all want to pass. Speed up.
BRANDO: What's the hurry? The signs say 50 and I'm doing 60 already!
<P>
KARI: (looks at dash)
<P>
KARI: That's 50 MILES per hour, metric boy.
BRANDO: Miles?

[Brando]

TrueNuff: Days of blunder
@
<P> Jay: Farm land, as far as the eye can see.
Trey: Yeah, smooth framerate too, they must be using a modified Tribes engine.
<P> [Jay looks pissed]
<P> JAY: No more bathroom breaks for you.
<P> TREY: Well seriously! If it was a Quake 2 -
JAY [interrupts] None!

[Brando]

TrueNuff: Days of blunder
@
<P> Jay: Farm land, as far as the eye can see.
Trey: Yeah, smooth framerate too, they must be using a modified Tribes engine.
<P> [Jay looks shifty.... cockeyed perhaps]
<P> JAY (serious...): No more bathroom breaks for you.
<P> TREY: Well seriously! If it was a Quake 2 -
JAY [interrupts, hand up] None!

[Brando]

TrueNuff: We recycle cans & paper & jokes
@ campsite, group sitting around in chairs or logs or something with beers, the all crack open and make fizzy sounds
<P3>
BRANDO: Pfftt!
JULIE: Pfftt!
ROB: Pfftt!
JAY (akimbos?): Pfftt! Pfftt!
RAYE: ...
TREY: Pfftt!
<P>
(TREY and JAY (closest 2?) looking at her beer, RAYE shrugs or something..)

[Brando]

TrueNuff: title
<P2>(guys in front of food cooler)
ROB: What did they get us to eat?
JAY: GUYS DONT EAT VEGGIE DOGS!
<P2>(girls in front of bevvy cooler)
JULIE: What did they get us to drink?
KARI: GIRLS DONT DRINK BEER!

[Brando]

TrueNuff: Live and unrooted
<P>(Brando is trying to talk to Raye, Kari is asleep)
BRANDO: Man, did you see the size of that cow?
<P>
BRANDO: You like that new song by Stumpface?
<P>
(shot of concert, dudes with tree stump masks on)
STUMPFACE: Hello Vancouver!
<P>
BRANDO: Yeah... me neither.

[Brando]

TrueNuff: Task Managers
<P>(@ campsite, setting up)
BRANDO (to ROB and JAY): Can you two setup the tent while I hang some tarps?
JAY: Yup.
ROB: Sounds good.
<P>(Jay and ROB with tent in BG maybe?)
TREY (To the GIRLS): Can you ladies hang the tarps while we set up the tent?
KARI: Ok.
JULIE: I guess so.
<P> (BRANDO and TREY are sitting behind car or tree or something having beer, others are working. Jay looks up off in the BG...)
JAY: Do I smell beer?
<P>(JAY notices BRANDO & TREY are missing, or sees em...)
JAY: Where's... HEY!

[Brando]

Yes, ANOTHER new one... whadda you think of this for next week??

Monday September 1st
TrueNuff: Task Managers
<P>(@ campsite, setting up)
BRANDO (to ROB and JAY): Can you two setup the tent while I hang some tarps?
JAY: Yup.
ROB: Sounds good.
<P>(Jay and ROB with tent in BG maybe?)
TREY (To the GIRLS): Can you ladies hang the tarps while we set up the tent?
KARI: Ok.
JULIE: I guess so.
<P> (BRANDO and TREY are sitting behind car or tree or something having beer, others are working. Jay looks up off in the BG...)
JAY: Do I smell beer?
<P>(JAY notices BRANDO & TREY are missing, or sees em...)
JAY: Where's... HEY!

Wednesday September 3rd
TrueNuff: Inconsiderate
<P2>(guys in front of food cooler)
ROB: What did they get us to eat?
JAY: GUYS DONT EAT VEGGIE DOGS!
<P2>(girls in front of bevvy cooler)
JULIE: What did they get us to drink?
KARI: GIRLS DONT DRINK BEER!

Friday September 5th
TrueNuff: Do your part! Recycle a joke!
@ campsite, group sitting around in chairs or logs or something with beers, the all crack open and make fizzy sounds
<P3>
BRANDO: Pfftt!
JULIE (soda): Pfftt!
ROB: Pfftt!
JAY (akimbos?): Pfftt! Pfftt!
RAYE (soda): ...
TREY: Pfftt!
<P>
(TREY and JAY looking at her beer, RAYE shrugs or something..)

[Threeboy]

what about the metric comic? also one of them arriving on site would be good. I thought you had one of those.

TrueNuff: Task Managers - getting good last two panels might have to be re-written somehow.

TrueNuff: Inconsiderate - goot to go *dap*

TrueNuff: Do your part! Recycle a joke! - goot to go *dap* but I might suggest title to simply "recycled jokes"

[Brando]

Metric Final!

TrueNuff: Imperial Rule
<P>@car
BRANDO: Why does Jay keep honking at me?
RAYE: *Shrug*
<P>Cars pass, dirty looks or shaking fists
KARI: Looks like they all want to pass. Speed up.
BRANDO: What's the hurry? The signs say fifty and I'm doing sixty already!
<P>
KARI: (looks at dash) That's fifty MILES per hour, metric boy.
<P>
BRANDO: Stupid Imperial measurement. I'd rather have a one-inch penis than use the imperial system.

[Brando]

one of them arriving on site would be good. I thought you had one of those.

I did, we rewrote it into the 'recycled jokes' one because you didn't like the setup... Task Managers was a new 'early arrival' type strip I did...

[Brando]

Another attempt at an arrival strip... just so this seriies will NEVER end :)

TrueNuff: Do unto others / If the tent is a rockin'
@ campsite or near ticket window / parking lot of site / etc
<P> (Jay has two tickets for the sites, he is talking to Brando & the girls at the window of their car. His car is in front of them I guess, but not necessarily visible)
JAY: Ok, we got two sites side-by-side. We'll park a car on each, and use one site for the tents and stuff, and the other for eating and fires and stuff.
<P>
KARI: What numbers are they?
<P>
JAY: We have sites sixty-eight and sixty-nine, any preferences?
<P>
BRANDO: AWWW YEAH! We'll take sixty-ni-
KARI: Eight. Thanks!
JAY: Hahaha... Denied!

[Threeboy]

did he get denied? they picked sixty eight.

[Threeboy]

for the TrueNuff: Task Managers perhaps jay feels a disturbance, or we can do a zoom up on his ear like he hears the beer or smells it or something... its not strong enough in it's current form i don't thinks

[Brando]

Monday September 1st
TrueNuff: Task Managers
<P>(@ campsite, setting up)
BRANDO (to ROB and JAY, Jay has cooler): Can you two setup the tent while I hang some tarps?
JAY: Yup.
ROB: Sounds good.
<P>(Jay and ROB with tent in BG maybe?)
TREY (To the GIRLS): Can you ladies hang the tarps while we set up the tent?
KARI: Ok.
JULIE: I guess so.
<P> (BRANDO and TREY are sitting behind car or tree or something having beer, others are working. Jay looks at the cooler...)
JAY: This is too light. It's like...
JAY: (bubble 2) Two beers are missing!
<P>(JAY notices BRANDO & TREY are missing, or sees em...)
JAY: And where's... HEY!

[Threeboy]

He should be holding the cooler in the first one shouldn't he?

Perhaps trey can tell him to move the cooler while he has an arm behind his back.. then brando tells the ladies to set up the tent..

does that work better?

[Brando]

yeah, that works too... then we get the steal in there too...

[Brando]

Monday September 1st
TrueNuff: Task Managers
<P>(@ campsite, setting up)
TREY (to ROB and JAY, TREY behind cooler, hands behind his back): Can you two setup the tent while I hang some tarps?
JAY: Yup, lemme grab that cooler.
TREY: Thanks.
<P>(Jay and ROB with tent in BG maybe?)
BRANDO (To the GIRLS): Can you ladies hang the tarps while we set up the tent?
KARI: Ok.
JULIE: I guess so.
<P> (BRANDO and TREY are sitting behind car or tree or something having beer, others are working. Jay looks at the cooler...)
JAY: This is too light. It's like...
JAY: (bubble 2) Two beers are missing!
<P>(JAY notices BRANDO & TREY are missing, or sees em...)
JAY: And where's... HEY!

[Threeboy]

seems like no reason to move the cooler..

perhaps "Yep, first I gotta move that cooler to the shade" or something.

[Brando]

or "the tent might go here, i better move the cooler"

[Threeboy]

something to that effect

"I'm thinking right here, lemme get that cooler out of the way"

or even re-write it again, it'd be cool for him to have those fingers directors use to frame things up, like he's visualizing the campsite.

[Brando]

Maybe ROB goes into director mode...

"Ah yes! I can see it now! Hey you (to JAY)! Get that cooler outta my shot!"

[Threeboy]

less characters = gooder for these last minute comics! :D

[Brando]

i thought he was in it anyways...

ok then

uise "I'm thinking right here, lemme get that cooler out of the way"

[Threeboy]

hoorays

[Brando]

Monday September 1st
TrueNuff: Task Managers
<P>(@ campsite, setting up)
TREY (to ROB and JAY, TREY behind cooler, hands behind his back): Can you two setup the tent while I hang some tarps?
JAY: Yup, I'm thinking right here, lemme get that cooler outta the way.
<P>(Jay and ROB with tent in BG maybe?)
BRANDO (To the GIRLS): Can you ladies hang the tarps while we set up the tent?
KARI: Ok.
JULIE: I guess so.
<P> (BRANDO and TREY are sitting behind car or tree or something having beer, others are working. Jay looks at the cooler...)
JAY: This is too light. It's like...
JAY: (bubble 2) Two beers are missing!
<P>(JAY notices BRANDO & TREY are missing, or sees em...)
JAY: And where's... HEY!

[Threeboy]

i took out "and where’s..." in the last panel, i thought "HEY!" was cool enough

[Brando]

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Monday September 15th
TrueNuff: Do your part! Recycle a joke!
@ campsite, group sitting around in chairs or logs or something with beers, the all crack open and make fizzy sounds
<P3>
BRANDO: Pfftt!
JULIE (soda): Pfftt!
ROB: Pfftt!
JAY (akimbos?): Pfftt! Pfftt!
RAYE (soda): ...
TREY: Pfftt!
<P>
(TREY and JAY looking at her beer, RAYE shrugs or something..)

[Threeboy]

Monday September 15th
TrueNuff: Do your part! Recycle a joke!

Move to this monday and re-name
TrueNuff: A Job well done!

I'll put tent in the BG like they done setting up & chillin with a beer.

[Brando]

The second strip (wednesday the 10th) is spawned off what you told me about initiating the biking subseries. Complete it with what you were thinking, I think I'm on the same track as you were implying...

Monday September 8th
TrueNuff: A Job Well Done
@ campsite, group sitting around in chairs or logs or something with beers, the all crack open and make fizzy sounds
<P3>
BRANDO: Pfftt!
JULIE (soda): Pfftt!
ROB: Pfftt!
JAY (akimbos?): Pfftt! Pfftt!
RAYE (soda): ...
TREY: Pfftt!
<P>
(TREY and JAY looking at her beer, RAYE shrugs or something..)

*** COMMENT REMOVED ***

[Threeboy]

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we should also do a fire ban comic

[Brando]

*** COMMENT DELETED ***

[Threeboy]

Easy Goin' Threeboy says:
dude! we gotta put the gnome in that shit too.
Easy Goin' Threeboy says:
camping series.
Brando | Work says:
i know. i was thinking of that. fuck sakes
Easy Goin' Threeboy says:
he can pop out of one of the girls bags when theyr'e getting changed.
Brando | Work says:
hahaha
Easy Goin' Threeboy says:
also, the girls tent will look HUGE inside.
Easy Goin' Threeboy says:
like a mansion, they'll have a potted plant and shit.
Brando | Work says:
and a vanity
Easy Goin' Threeboy says:
the guys will be like "you're supposed to be roughing it!"
Easy Goin' Threeboy says:
they'll be like we ARE roughing it! we're sharing the hair dryer or some crap...
Brando | Work says:
"Uh, HELLO! There's only ONE SINK!"
Easy Goin' Threeboy says:
HHHAHAH yeah exactly

[Brando]

Truenuff: Smack My Beach Up
@ beach
<P>
[gettin outta car - jay has white legs, girls laugh walking by, sign with <- campsites || beach ->]
GIRLS: First time outside? Nice legs whitey! Hahaha... etc
<P>
TREY: Guess you shoulda pre-tanned<P>
JAY: They won't notice me anymore
TREY: Why not?
<P2>
[rob gets outta car & his legs are ultrabright, like so bright you can't distinguish their shapes hardly, maybe a lens-flare in there even, perhaps use some space to show the girls cowering from the light]

TrueNuff: Sisqo
<P> (maybe they're making a sand castle... it should look like castle greyskull or the Simpsons house or something... rob gets up)
ROB: I hate getting sand in my thong
<P> (looks)
JAY: Your what?
<P>
ROB: My thongs! Thongs! You know, sandals!
<P>
(Everyone is looking at Robs feet, he is barefoot)

[Brando]

- Making sand-castle-greyskull... they put a he-man in it... gnome sees it and fights it... (strip 2 ->) rob tries to tell the guys, they are staring at the girls in bikinis or something

-making a sand castle
-- our sand castle is gonna be way better than yours
-- (holding stone bricks, huge wall in edge of panel) Sand?

-gnome wrecks castle, gets bucketed again... the water level starts rising... (crap, guess that doesnt happen in a lake...) (did we say it was a lake?)

[Threeboy]

i like the angle where gnome tries to sabotauge thier trip but it backfires


also, should the girls do more? at the beach?

[Brando]

TrueNuff: Two hands and two legs and no balls
(Monday the 15th)
<P> (guys outside, books, GBA, beer, whatever & hear a scream from tent)
JAY: The girls!
<P> (getting up, still screming in bg)
TREY: We're coming!
<P> (brando stays seated, looks confused, still screaming in bg)
BRANDO: But that's OUR tent...
<P> (in tent, Rob looking at spider, screaming)
ROB: EEEEEEEE!

TrueNuff: Same old song and dunce
(Wednesday the 17th)
<P>(girls in tent, close up on duffle bag, Kari is unzipping)
KARI: Anyone seen my hair dryer?
<P>(gnome pops out of bag with axe wielded)
GNOME: Hell will dry you faster, whore!
<P> (guys outside, books, GBA, beer, whatever & hear a scream from other tent)
JAY: (doesnt look up) Kill it yourself Rob!
ROB: Kill what myself?
JAY: The spider
<P> (Jay still seated, rob runs)
ROB: SPIDER? EEEEEE!!!

TrueNuff: Roughing It
(Friday the 19th)
<P> (getting up again)
TREY: That scream was from the girls tent!
<P> (running over)
JAY: We're coming!
<P> (stepping into tent)
TREY: What's the...
<P> (Far back shot, huge tent, crazy appliances, guys in middle looking small and amazed (maybe from behind as they look into the tent), in the BG the girls are chasing the gnome with brushes and a broom etc, and the gnome is screaming...)
BRANDO: Whoa...

[Threeboy]

TrueNuff: Same old song and dunce - I don't know about this one.

TrueNuff: Roughing It - how huge does the tent look?

also, another angle i was gonna try was when they all got back from the beach the girls want to shower.. but the guys tell them there are no showers at this camp site.

the girls are surprsied.

the guys are like 'what's the matter, you booked it?' then the girls go 'yeah, but you gave us teh number!'

or something like that, I don't know that was lame.

[Brando]

Um, ok. So monday is good? Can you let me know so I can template it?
--
Do you want the gnome popping out to be the punchline? What did you want for the 'joke' then?
--
The tent can be as big as you want... huge with a frigging water fountain and birds flying around or just big like a high ceiling and tons of space between their sleeping bags, I dunno. I guess it depends on whether we go overboard or not... we can exaggerate as much as we want. Apart from that, how is the comic? Does that work for a reason for them to go into the tent? What else? Your criticism isnt contructive enough. I have no idea what you dont like when you dont like them.

As for yours, thats realistic too. Does it need to be monday's? Can we work it out after? The girls can always out of the blue say "hey, where are the showers?"... maybe after that dialog you mentioned, the punchline can be that they say "well how are we supposed to get clean then?" and then it starts pouring rain (which it did)...

[Threeboy]

hahaha,

the rain thing would be good.

not sure about the punchline.

don't know how to go into the tent.

we do have concept for "we only have ONE SINK!" comic..

we gotta write the gnome in funny.

rain thing is rpetty funny though, we can use that and the showers thing for a comic...

also, do we have any more beach comics? We only had two?

we could adapt this one
http://www.truenuff.com/forums/viewtopic.php?t=1414

you know what kicks ass? Bikinis! you know what sucks ass? BIKINIS! (fat woman)

how do you feel about that? I'm not too stoked, but to extend the beach series atleast one more it might be alright.. unless you think it works better with teh pants angle, or even if you ahve another idea.

[Brando]

just reread your comments... the bikini thing would be good... we could do it with a fatman thing too... less offensive to chicks...

<P4>(left side is a babe in a thong or bikini or whatever, brando sees this, the middle has trey next to him, but looking right, where at the right edge is a man in a speedo, hairy back etc....)
BRANDO: You know what kicks ass? Tiny Bathing suits.
TREY: You know what sucks ass? Tiny Bathing suits.

[Threeboy]

i like that angle

[Threeboy]

TrueNuff:

<P4>(left side is a babe in a thong or bikini or whatever, brando sees this, the middle has trey next to him, but looking right, where at the right edge is a man in a speedo, hairy back etc....)
BRANDO: You know what kicks ass? Tiny Bathing suits.
TREY: You know what sucks ass? Tiny Bathing suits.

(background: Jay with HUGE sand castle)

[Brando]

Perhapples for the lineup, we should have it start by Julie or Kari saying (intending the girls to hear)
"can someone put lotion on my back?" and a line forms...

<P> (Kari holds lotion)
KARI: Can someone put lotion on my back?
<P> (there is a line all of a sudden)
<P> (Kari is moving along the line)
KARI: No, no, no, too smoky (a smoker), too short (gnome?), too hairy (Bitch?) etc...
<P> (she gets to the crew, maybe they all have mustard & ketchup bottles behind their backs or something, like they are planning to get her)
KARI: (suspicious) No... Too sneaky... and too wierd.
JAY: Damn!

[Threeboy]

haha, it can be an 8p

i'll try to think of more iddeas

[Brando]

From the hands on approach thread...

TrueNuff: Where ya from?
@ i dont know but camera frames waist up
<P> BRANDO: Excuse me, I didn't mean to look, but you have something on your butt.
<P> GIRL: Oh I do? What?
BRANDO: (closer) My hand.
<P>
GIRL: Well, you have something on your crotch...
BRANDO (excited / smiling): Oh yeah? What?
<P>
GIRL: My foot. (crunch)

[Brando]

Maybe for the lineup, they can move along the line and near the end is Bitch bear, gnome, george & george... and they can be like 'this is getting weird, it's time to leave' and thus end the beach series somehow...

[Threeboy]

dunnos if that can be it.

if we cant think of line up punchline then we can drop it, and end the beach some other way...

[Threeboy]

ICQ:

perhaps we can think of something with this mustard thing
and ketchup
perhaps the girls face down, and the guys putting ketchup and mustard on thier backs

alright
how bout this
back at the camp site
brando is in the background with an ice pack on his nuts
then the girls ask about showers
and then the guys say no showers
then the girls ask how to get clean
then it starts raininig

[Threeboy]

Maelstrom (12:02 AM) :
maybe a p4 with the girls like 'thanks for putting lotion on us guys'
Threeboy (12:03 AM) :
hahah would they be that greatful?

Maelstrom (12:03 AM) :
and then the showers one
Maelstrom (12:03 AM) :
well, maybe the guys would be
Threeboy (12:03 AM) :
hahaha
Threeboy (12:03 AM) :
the girls can be like, wow this feels smooth, is this a new type of lotion?
Maelstrom (12:03 AM) :
maybe the girls are like if we can lotion up your back, you can do ours after
Threeboy (12:03 AM) :
and the guys are like "er, yeah"
Maelstrom (12:04 AM) :
then the guys get it... but the girls are the ones who need to get cleaned
Threeboy (12:04 AM) :
hahah
Threeboy (12:04 AM) :
P3
Threeboy (12:04 AM) :
the guys putting "lotion" on the girls
Threeboy (12:04 AM) :
then a P1 showing the guy's heads popping out of sand, thier hwole bodies burried... and then faces covered in ketchup and mustard respecitvely
Threeboy (12:05 AM) :
"nice plan jackass"
Threeboy (12:05 AM) :
"it was a good idea at the time!"
Maelstrom (12:05 AM) :
hahaha....
Threeboy (12:05 AM) :
something like that
Threeboy (12:05 AM) :
the girls gotta retaliate or it's "sexist"

[Threeboy]

TrueNuff: Heinz
@ Beach
<P3> (Girls lying belly down - Trey putting ketchup on julie's back, Jay putting mustard on kari's back - it's funny cause the girls don't know)
Julie: Wow this feels smooth, is it a new kind of tanning lotion?
Trey: Er, yeah...
<P1> (see just guys heads popping out of sand, ketchup and mustard on faces respecitvely)
Jay: Nice Plan JACKASS!
Trey: I didn't think they'd "KETCHUP" to us!

[Threeboy]

TrueNuff: Heinz
@ Beach
<P3> (Girls lying belly down - Trey putting ketchup on julie's back, Jay putting mustard on kari's back - it's funny cause the girls don't know)
Julie: Wow this feels smooth, is it a new kind of tanning lotion?
Trey: Er, yeah...
Jay: It's frenchies, er I mean FRENCH, yeah It's FRENCH.
<P1> (see just guys heads popping out of sand, ketchup and mustard on faces respecitvely)
Jay: Nice Plan JACKASS!
Trey: I didn't think they'd "KETCHUP" to us!

[Threeboy]

(After IM's with Maelstrom)

VERSION 3, HUTZA!

TrueNuff: Easy Sueeze
@ Beach
<P3> (Girls lying belly down - Trey putting ketchup on julie's back, Jay putting mustard on kari's back - it's funny cause the girls don't know)
:kari: Wow this feels smooth, is it a new kind of tanning lotion?
:jay: i'm sure youve used it before
:trey: (looking twoards jay & kari) It's frenchies, er I mean FRENCH, yeah It's FRENCH.
:julie: Nice! It's good to know I wont be all red in an hour...
<P1> (see just guys heads popping out of sand, ketchup and mustard on faces respecitvely)
:jay: Great plan, Jackass
:trey: I didn't think they'd ketchup to us

I think that's a *DAP*

[Brando]

*DAP*

[Brando]

Monday September 22nd
TrueNuff: Cloudy Pee
<P> (back @ camp, Brando with ice on nuts but is laughing at girls, girls with condiments on backs, side view perhaps?)
BRANDO: Sexy!
JULIE: Hush. Where are the showers?
<P>
BRANDO: Showers? There are no showers.
<P>
KARI: Then how are we supposed to get clean?
<P> (Raining)

[Brando]

Wednesday September 24th
TrueNuff: Two hands and two legs and no balls
<P> (guys outside, books, GBA, beer, whatever & hear a scream from tent)
JAY: The girls!
<P> (getting up, still screming in bg)
TREY: We're coming!
<P> (brando stays seated, looks confused, still screaming in bg)
BRANDO: But that's OUR tent...
<P> (in tent, Rob looking at spider, screaming)
ROB: EEEEEEEE!

[Brando]

Friday September 26th
TrueNuff: Get back in the kitchen
<P> (sitting around)
JAY: I thought the girls were gonna make some dinner.
TREY: Yeah, they haven't come out of that tent in like 20 minutes and I'm hungry.
<P>
JAY: Hey Ladies! When are you gonna start dinner?
(response from inside tent)
VOICE: WE ALREADY HAVE!
<P> ( Jay getting up)
TREY: Huh?
JAY: I'll go see what they're doing
<P> (inside tent, dang big)
JAY: Whoa

Monday September 29th
TrueNuff: Roughing It
<P> (Jay is amazed at size of tent)
JAY: This thing is huge!
KARI: Well there are THREE of us in here!
<P> (trey comes in, looking at a kitchen- type area, or corner if its not TOO big)
TREY: Holy Crap! Is that a minifridge?
<P>
JAY: We're supposed to be roughing it!
<P>
JULIE: We ARE roughing it... There's only ONE SINK!

[Threeboy]

Monday September 29th
TrueNuff: Roughing It
<P> (Jay is amazed at size of tent)
JAY: This thing is huge!
KARI: Well there are THREE of us in here!
<P> (trey comes in, looking at a kitchen- type area, or corner if its not TOO big)
TREY: Holy Crap! Is that a minifridge?
<P>
JAY: We're supposed to be roughing it!
<P>
JULIE: HELLO!? There's only ONE sink!


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just a tweak to last line, we might be able to put trey & jay's lines into one panel and squeeze more front dialog in...

[Brando]

Rain Ideas:

girls hair gets wet... guys laugh, but they have hair dryers...

tents leak?

river?

fire goes out?

gnome makes a boat? sinks in mud?

[Brando]

Wednesday September 24th
TrueNuff: Two hands and two legs and no balls
<P> (guys outside, books, GBA, beer, whatever & hear a scream from tent, theyre already getting up, brando looks confused)
JAY: The girls!
TREY: We're coming!
BRANDO: But that OUR tent...
<P> (in tent, rob is pointing at spider, has wet spot on pants)
TREY: Are you ok -
JAY: DUDE!
<P>
TREY: A spider?
JAY: Your pants!
<P> (Rob looks at pants)
ROB: The rain got in...

[Brando]

Wednesday September 24th
TrueNuff: Two hands and two legs and no balls
<P> (guys outside, books, GBA, beer, whatever & hear a scream from tent, theyre already getting up, brando looks confused)
JAY: The girls!
TREY: We're coming!
BRANDO: But that OUR tent...
<P> (in tent, rob is pointing at spider, has wet spot on pants)
TREY: What's wrong?
ROB: A spider!
<P> (they all look at his pants)
<P>
TREY: That better be rain

[Threeboy]

*dap*

[Threeboy]

I like my last minute title changes :P

[Brando]

Is this one ok?

Monday September 29th
TrueNuff: Roughing It
<P> (Jay is amazed at size of tent)
JAY: This thing is huge!
KARI: Well there are THREE of us in here!
<P> (trey comes in, looking at a kitchen- type area, or corner if its not TOO big)
TREY: Holy Crap! Is that a minifridge?
<P>
JAY: We're supposed to be roughing it!
<P>
JULIE: We ARE roughing it... There's only ONE SINK!

[Brando]

You'll probably not like these. No punchlines, but kinda funny events. This is only one way to make the sabotage thing happen that I can think of.

Tuesday...
TrueNuff: Boulder Dash
<P> (rob crawling into frame, bloody)
JAY: Hey, how was your hike?
TREY: Dude! What happened?
<P> (ROB gets up)
ROB: Canada rocks.
JAY: Well, yeah, but what happened?
<P> (pointing and starting to run, TREY and JAY turn and look)
ROB: CANADA ROCKS!!
<P> (boulders rolling by, they're running, gnome pops up from a hiding place or something and has a light bulb- idea)

Wednesday...
(this might be hard to draw, maybe we need to do something else.)

TrueNuff: Rock and (if lucky) roll
<P> (Gnome looking on campsite from high above on a cliff)
<P> (Gnome tosses rock)
<P> (rock tinks to a rest at the bottom near a tent)
<P> (Gnome leaning on a boulder as if to push it)

Thursday...
TrueNuff: Rollin' with my Gnomies
<P> (Gnome pushing against boulder, daytime)
<P> (Gnome pushing against boulder, sunset)
<P> (Gnome pushing against boulder, nighttime)
<P> (Gnome leaning against boulder, tired, looks pissed, daytime, pulled back, hes looking back and has only moved a small amount (short groove in ground shoes travel distance))

Friday...
TrueNuff: Too little, too late
<P> (Gnome pushes on boulder)
<P> (boulder bouncing down hill)
<P> (Gnome at top arms in air, crash sound)
<P> (Gnome at campsite, boulder in middle, everyone gone)

[Brando]

How else can we intro the gnome and make him try something? what else would you have in mind for next week? We'll meet up this weekend and figger it out. When you free? I am basically free both days all days.

[Threeboy]

good starts, some need work, but good framework overall.

I'm free saturday afternoon / evening / night

I'm free sunday evening / night

[Brando]

Meeting: Approx 3:30 - 6pm Saturday. Mark Your Calendars!

[Threeboy]

its in my planner

[Brando]

Monday September 29th
TrueNuff: Roughing It
<P> (Jay is amazed at size of tent)
JAY: This thing is huge!
KARI: Well there are THREE of us in here!
<P> (trey comes in, looking at a kitchen- type area, or corner if its not TOO big)
TREY: Holy Crap! Is that a minifridge?
<P>
JAY: We're supposed to be roughing it!
<P>
JULIE: We ARE roughing it... There's only ONE SINK!

Tuesday September 30th
TrueNuff: Pillow Talk
<P3> (2 tents lined up, it’s night time)
GUYS TENT: Goodnight / Goodnight / Goodnight
GIRLS TENT: Goodnight / Goodnight / Goodnight / Gooooood NIGHT!
<P>
GIRLS TENT: Brando! Get out!!

Wednesday October 1st
TrueNuff: Mourning Would?
<P> (Rob crawling outta tent, glasses on)
ROB: Coffee…
<P> (JAY crawling outta tent)
JAY: Beer…
<P> (Trey crawling out)
TREY: Gameboy…
<P> (Watching, coffees in hand)
JULIE: We need to get new friends…

Thursday October 2nd
TrueNuff: Gnome for the gold!
<P> (in morning, all standing around sleepy…)
JAY: If I wasn’t so drunk, all your snoring would’ve kept me up
TREY: The sound of the rain didn’t help either
<P>
ROB: Yeah! It rained so hard my sleeping bag got wet!
<P> (Rob blushing)
<P> (Gnome looking over the campsite)
GNOME: At last! They are all together! Now is my chance!

Friday October 3rd
TrueNuff: Rollin' with my Gnomies
<P> (Gnome pushing against boulder, daytime)
<P> (Gnome pushing against boulder, sunset)
<P> (Gnome pushing against boulder, nighttime)
<P> (Gnome leaning against boulder, tired, looks pissed, daytime)
<P> (Gnome pushes on boulder)
<P> (boulder bouncing down hill)
<P> (in car, going home)
TREY: That was a fun trip!
JAY: It’ll be nice to get into something dry
ROB: (sideways glance) Yeah…
<P> (Gnome at campsite, boulder in middle, everyone gone)
GNOME: Blast!

[Threeboy]

*PUD*